Mormo Test Footage! Please comment!!

This footage started off as a script for a movie I was going to make. Then I had an idea about a much better story and decided to make that movie instead. I hadn't written the script yet though and I wanted to shoot something so I decided to just shoot some test footage from the script I had already wrote. My plan was to charge to see the test footage then use that money to make the movie I really wanted to make. Well the test footage really sucked so I decided to just ask people to make a comment on it instead of trying to raise money with it. Making movies is hard, I might just write a book instead IDK? Please comment!!!!